MB, are you referring to the pilot screenplay (which to be fair, is what an actress interested in the role would have been sent to read), or the final cut as shown at the Festival?
I don't even recall the Alec Newman scene that's on Youtube from that original screening; just that I thought Newman was really quite exceptional in the role
the scene begins immediately with Joe explaining to Elizabeth and Roger that "Ben Griffin found her outside his garage. From the injuries, Doctor Hoffman thinks… (pauses) She must have had some kind of fall."
Julia ... make(s) her appearance by calling out "Clear the doors!" as Carolyn is brought through the opening doors on a gurney. Also arriving with Carolyn is a nurse.
Elizabeth sees Carolyn being wheeled in on the gurney and she calls out "Carolyn."
the nurse accompanying Carolyn announces "She’s tachy."
after Carolyn's appearance, (Elizabeth) asks "Can I walk with her?" - and after it being indicated that she can, does so as Carolyn is taken off.
I presume (because I don't honestly remember) that Joe also went with her because, as I've said, he has nothing more to say. So, in the pilot at this point, the only major characters left in the corridor are probably Julia and Roger.
Sheriff Patterson ... notices Julia as he arrives and ... asks, "Julia, how is she?" - obviously referring to Carolyn.
Julia ... says "She's hanging on...barely."
filling in some very cliche (for a vampire drama) medical details
we're up against the beginning of July and Barnabas has yet to arrive at Collinwood....
Barbara Steele made an immediate, VIVID impression upon me in the shot of her just standing on the train platform in her very first shot, holding an umbrella.
From this pilot, I think the crypt scene and the stalking scene would have been remembered for some time.