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Current Talk '24 I / Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« on: January 15, 2017, 07:46:04 AM »
And here's how the rest of "Hanging David" plays in the first draft:
End of sequence. Some is different - much is exactly the same. Originally Roger never asks "What the devil are you talking about?" after he enters Maggie's room and sees nothing - and Maggie originally says much more than "We -- we had a fight about his homework --" - but then, prior to delivering that, she gets new dialogue when "There -- there -- the closet" is added in the rewrite.
Interestingly, the sequence that will begin on Monday is set in a totally different location in DC's script than it is in the original draft. But more on that after we finish the first scene in DC's script's version of that sequence...
12 INT. MAGGIE'S ROOM - NIGHT - CLOSE UP MAGGIE 12 CAMERA TRUCKS her to closet. MAGGIE We had a fight about his home- -work. Then, I couldn't find him. I was getting my coat to go out... in case he had gone to the cot- tage...I opened that door. WIDER As Roger opens the closet door. There is a flash of lightning. He looks in, as Liz and Mrs. Johnson enter shot. ROGER I don't know what you expected us to see, Miss Evans. 13 THEIR POV - CLOSET - ZOOM IN 13 It is empty. 14 MAGGIE 14 She is confused, not understanding. CAMERA TRUCKS her to GROUP SHOT. 14 CONTD CONTD 14 MAGGIE He was hanging there -- They move aside, as she goes to the open door. She shakes her head, not understanding. MAGGIE He was! She turns to them. 15 GROUP SHOT 15 MRS. JOHNSON It was one of David's tricks. That's what it was. ROGER I think, dear sister, that Miss Evans needs a vacation. Obviously her nerves have gotten the better of her. He starts to leave the room. Maggie is astonished. MAGGIE Aren't you even going to go look for him? ROGER No. And if you do, don't come running to me with any more tall tales. 16 He exits. Liz looks at Maggie and Mrs. Johnson. 16 A look which says this is not finished yet. LIZ He'll look for him. She exits as CAMERA TRUCKS INTO TIGHT SHOT OF MAGGIE. |
End of sequence. Some is different - much is exactly the same. Originally Roger never asks "What the devil are you talking about?" after he enters Maggie's room and sees nothing - and Maggie originally says much more than "We -- we had a fight about his homework --" - but then, prior to delivering that, she gets new dialogue when "There -- there -- the closet" is added in the rewrite.
Interestingly, the sequence that will begin on Monday is set in a totally different location in DC's script than it is in the original draft. But more on that after we finish the first scene in DC's script's version of that sequence...